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Overall I agree with the feedback mainly to do with my action being quite long as some times I was writing up to 5 lines for each action and there would only be like 1 line of dialogue before the next chunk so when I improve my script I am going to try and cut down my action parts a bit more to 3-4 lines. I am also going to try and make the clown less comedic as it was mentioned in my feedback because this is a horror opening not a comedy and therefore I am going to have the clown say much less and more realistic for filming because a clown doll can't hold a knife but if it comes to filming the clown shots will most probably be in the pov of the clown. I also agreed that it escalated very quickly so I'm going to have Hunter do something else before the clown properly attacks and then I will also integrate a scene with Trish and Tripp into the action with Hunter.
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Feedback Evaluation
Overall I agree with the feedback mainly to do with my action being quite long as some times I was writing up to 5 lines for each action and there would only be like 1 line of dialogue before the next chunk so when I improve my script I am going to try and cut down my action parts a bit more to 3-4 lines. I am also going to try and make the clown less comedic as it was mentioned in my feedback because this is a horror opening not a comedy and therefore I am going to have the clown say much less and more realistic for filming because a clown doll can't hold a knife but if it comes to filming the clown shots will most probably be in the pov of the clown. I also agreed that it escalated very quickly so I'm going to have Hunter do something else before the clown properly attacks and then I will also integrate a scene with Trish and Tripp into the action with Hunter.
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